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bluepixiegurl316
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jackryan
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I haven't read 28 yet is it really that dark??It's dark af too
Not as hot as the build up.
bluepixiegurl316
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Just a turn off to see people being abusive I guess. Like, why would you do things that in a normal world would make someone try to kill themselves? An antagonist doing that makes sense but if a loved one does that to me, even if I hate myself and deal with depression, I don't find it attractive or endearing or anything. Being a loser or a slut is one thing, being evil is a way different. Probably the same reason Toxic Attraction started turning me off. Doing things that hurt the kids was just gross.
jackryan
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You have the last chapters and epilogue of the bet?
DermotH
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Chapter 28 is the last one I seen on https://kemono.cr/patreon/user/12794338/post/147592431
Rollingfun
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At this point, and I donāt mean this in a patronising way, why donāt you just subscribe to his account and read the story there - itās literally only Ā£4.
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jackryan
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I don't think it's worth it I only want last chapter of the story for that to buy a month subscription I don't think so and I have other artist's subscription.
Rollingfun
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Youāve been asking for it for over a month (over 2/3 months asking for other parts to his stories). As I said - itās a one off payment of Ā£4 and then you have it.
KidneyCracker
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Thanks for posting that. I haven't read any of the series but did just read Chapter 29, Option B. With the subtitle of Dan Triumphant, I was hoping for some burn the bitch vibes.
For one chapter it did established his wife and Zane as complete assholes... Not sure how a wife goes from even being a bad wife to that over the course of a story, but whatever. There's worse character changes on literotica.
The character I disliked the most was Leah. Zane and Claire are obvious and cartoonish, but Leah is inconsistent, almost bipolar but defiintely martian-slut-ray. She helps Dan break the cycle, becomes his ally and builds him up... but mid-way through his renaissance, he discovers she wasn't as committed to breaking free as she said. It would have been so satisfying if this revitalized man had confronted her about "the incident" and said "get out." Just, confirm what he was told and tell her to get out, Instead he fucks her. Guess there were no other character that would have been a better choice to help him.
I don't really understand this type of story and it's been pretty popular for a few years now. Like Toxic Attraction and a lot of these cuckold and ntr stories, I don't understand what the villains get out these stories... there's no joy for any of the characters. no winners, all losers. like what's their end goal? ruining a marriage? "Congrats, you broke up a marriage. You've won a gullible and naive affair partner that is a cruel proven cheater. Don't want to keep her? Your bonus prize is at least two more people that probably want revenge on you. Years of looking over your shoulder for danger."
I'm not going to read this series and based on this being "the happy ending", I'm glad I didn't. As an avid reader of relationship dramas, this chapter was "alright". The husband woke but but it wasn't as satisfying as a BTB or revenge story. At least Dan takes a stand and survives the horrible people he's surrounded by, including Leah.
There were a couple of lost opportunities though:
1. Dan runs into Zane and Clare at the end. Have a final final confrontation to reinforce the new Dan. wrap things up so he can be assured there won't be a sequel.
2. post-cruise meeting with Leah where he learns how his resistance ruined Zane and Clare's plans and rendered zane virtually impotent.
3. kicking the shit out of zane after he threw the first punch
4. kicking leah to the curb, acknowledge the college crush but point out that is gone because of how "ugly" her actions have made her...
5. get rid of the breeding scenario. wasn't needed. we already know leah her husband are bent.
6. acknowledge that leah's truth has squashed the college crush he had on her.
7. record the conversation with Zane and publish it online to tarnish his street cred.
I'd rate this as average for a relationship drama. Getting revenge on Claire and Zane would have made it a 4-star story, 5 if Dan had been a stronger character in a dramatic fashion, completely walking away from that scene.
For one chapter it did established his wife and Zane as complete assholes... Not sure how a wife goes from even being a bad wife to that over the course of a story, but whatever. There's worse character changes on literotica.
The character I disliked the most was Leah. Zane and Claire are obvious and cartoonish, but Leah is inconsistent, almost bipolar but defiintely martian-slut-ray. She helps Dan break the cycle, becomes his ally and builds him up... but mid-way through his renaissance, he discovers she wasn't as committed to breaking free as she said. It would have been so satisfying if this revitalized man had confronted her about "the incident" and said "get out." Just, confirm what he was told and tell her to get out, Instead he fucks her. Guess there were no other character that would have been a better choice to help him.
I don't really understand this type of story and it's been pretty popular for a few years now. Like Toxic Attraction and a lot of these cuckold and ntr stories, I don't understand what the villains get out these stories... there's no joy for any of the characters. no winners, all losers. like what's their end goal? ruining a marriage? "Congrats, you broke up a marriage. You've won a gullible and naive affair partner that is a cruel proven cheater. Don't want to keep her? Your bonus prize is at least two more people that probably want revenge on you. Years of looking over your shoulder for danger."
I'm not going to read this series and based on this being "the happy ending", I'm glad I didn't. As an avid reader of relationship dramas, this chapter was "alright". The husband woke but but it wasn't as satisfying as a BTB or revenge story. At least Dan takes a stand and survives the horrible people he's surrounded by, including Leah.
There were a couple of lost opportunities though:
1. Dan runs into Zane and Clare at the end. Have a final final confrontation to reinforce the new Dan. wrap things up so he can be assured there won't be a sequel.
2. post-cruise meeting with Leah where he learns how his resistance ruined Zane and Clare's plans and rendered zane virtually impotent.
3. kicking the shit out of zane after he threw the first punch
4. kicking leah to the curb, acknowledge the college crush but point out that is gone because of how "ugly" her actions have made her...
5. get rid of the breeding scenario. wasn't needed. we already know leah her husband are bent.
6. acknowledge that leah's truth has squashed the college crush he had on her.
7. record the conversation with Zane and publish it online to tarnish his street cred.
I'd rate this as average for a relationship drama. Getting revenge on Claire and Zane would have made it a 4-star story, 5 if Dan had been a stronger character in a dramatic fashion, completely walking away from that scene.
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