[asdfghjkl1590] The Salon Internship

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Really enjoyed the images you made for this story, the story itself was alright. Did you ever make a PDF of this story?

However iā€™m excited to see where the roomate one leads. Same thing with that story as this story is just alright in narrative.

I think of when he goes to class in your story roommate rewrite panel 65, in the previous panels he looks to be dressed normal in ā€œmale clothesā€ then all the sudden heā€™s in class with what looks like boobs, a womenā€™s turtle neck etc itā€™s such a big change which is where the story loses itself in my eyes, I feel like the narrative portion skipped a bunch of steps, but your artwork is phenomenal and I enjoy seeing the changes which is what keeps me along for the ride. On a side note if you slow down the pacing we might also lose interest, itā€™s definitely a tough balancing act.

All in all iā€™m excited to see how your story telling continues to develop as does your artwork. Been watching you since day one on devintart šŸ™ƒ
 
AgentOxegen said:
Really enjoyed the images you made for this story, the story itself was alright. Did you ever make a PDF of this story?

However iā€™m excited to see where the roomate one leads. Same thing with that story as this story is just alright in narrative.

I think of when he goes to class in your story roommate rewrite panel 65, in the previous panels he looks to be dressed normal in ā€œmale clothesā€ then all the sudden heā€™s in class with what looks like boobs, a womenā€™s turtle neck etc itā€™s such a big change which is where the story loses itself in my eyes, I feel like the narrative portion skipped a bunch of steps, but your artwork is phenomenal and I enjoy seeing the changes which is what keeps me along for the ride. On a side note if you slow down the pacing we might also lose interest, itā€™s definitely a tough balancing act.

All in all iā€™m excited to see how your story telling continues to develop as does your artwork. Been watching you since day one on devintart šŸ™ƒ
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Thank you so much for taking the time to write such detailed feedback. It genuinely means a lot, especially since you've been following me since day one on DeviantArt. šŸ˜Š

This was actually only my second comic, so I completely agree with you about the sudden body changes and inconsistencies. Looking back, there are definitely parts where I skipped too many steps in the transformation, and it hurts the progression of the story. It's something I'm paying a lot more attention to going forward.

I also know the story itself was a bit simple. It was never actually meant to be a 100+ panel comic. When I first finished it, it was only around 30 panels, but it felt way too rushed and incomplete. So I went back and added a lot of panels in between to flesh it out. Even then, there are definitely things I'd do differently now.

Right now I'm honestly just working with whatever free AI tools I can get access to, and my laptop is really old too. I can't even generate images locallyā€”it can literally take a couple of hours just to get one image, and it still turns out terrible. šŸ˜… So I'm doing the best I can with what I have.

That said, I really want to keep improving. Visual storytelling and narration are the parts I enjoy the most, and I want people to feel immersed and feel the progression instead of feeling like scenes were skipped.

I'm putting a lot more focus into the Roommate story. My goal with that comic is to make it more of a romantic, feel-good story with a slower, more believable progression. I really hope you'll enjoy where it goes. I've been trying to put everything I've learned into that one, so hopefully everything will feel much smoother and better.

Thanks again for sticking around since the beginning on DeviantArtā€”it honestly means a lot. And no PDF for this one yet, but it's something I might put together in the future.
 
Jackjons said:
Thanks for the comment! šŸ˜Š

I definitely wanted to include nude and more mature scenes, but I couldn't because of my laptop and resource limitations at the time. This comic was created using free AI tools that I had available, so I had to work within those limits.

As I continue learning and upgrade my setup, I do plan to include more mature content in future projects where it fits the story.

But there's this one panel that I did manually using photoshop.
let me know your thoughts on that!

Thanks again for reading and for sharing your thoughtsā€”I really appreciate the feedback! ā¤ļø
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