[DesireLama] The Stream (On Going) (Original HD)

[Arthur Saturnin]

 

[Arthur Saturnin]

 

[Arthur Saturnin]

Is Laura supposed to be his mother…?

If so, then why does the boy ‘call’ her by her ‘name’ instead of ‘saying’ mom…?!?

The answer lies at the beginning of the story: She’s been a model for several decades, so she’s very attached to her image (a bit of a “glass-case” type...)—she didn’t embrace her role as a mother, she didn’t develop traditional maternal bonds with him, and she didn’t want him to call her “Mom” but rather by her first name. It’s a good idea—it makes it easier to break through the parent-child barrier.

And this becomes clear during the live stream, where she gets swept up in the moment because more than 19,000 guys are watching her on their screens and she finally (as she puts it) achieves fame in a matter of minutes. This confirms her psychological fragility and her tendency toward superficiality.

 

[Arthur Saturnin]

I’ve seen the first issue, and I see some problems with it.
There is too much AI involved in generating the models.
I assume this is why the image sizes are disproportionate.
The text leaves a lot to be desired, both in terms of how the lettering looks (not very good) and the spelling errors.
I feel the speech bubbles were added in a rather sloppy way; looking at page 37, it even seems like one bubble was superimposed over another (where it says "Laura!"), which makes me wonder if there’s an alternative version where she has a different kind of relationship with him or calls him by a different name.
I also noticed some recycled pages (29 and 30; 67, 74, and 80; 75 and 78).
And I find it very strange that the last page (101) lacks the usual "To be continued" or "End of episode" notice.
That said, the story itself strikes me as interesting and full of potential.
My advice to the artist: more craftsmanship, less AI. Optimize image sizes and improve the appearance of the speech bubbles.


Edit: I just saw that the artist's Suscribestar account is under review. I wish the guy all the luck in the world and hope they don't shut it down.

There is too much AI involved in generating the models.
It's glaringly obvious. There's such a stark contrast between the characters' appearance and the set design—which is just awful, with a rough finish and poor visual quality. The textures of the floor, the walls, the son's computer equipment, etc.
But human models are create from DAZ3D with Genesis 8.0/8.1 models, not from AI.

The text leaves a lot to be desired, both in terms of how the lettering looks (not very good) and the spelling errors.
He received sound advice to correct all of this, for example, via: https://www.grammarly.com/
Which would certainly be no small help.

And I find it very strange that the last page (101) lacks the usual "To be continued" or "End of episode" notice.
You're right, but he doesn't use the commonly used phrase “To be continued.” That's because he hasn't published the rest yet, but Chapter 2 isn't complete. Half of it is missing.

That said, the story itself strikes me as interesting and full of potential.
I agree with you—that’s its strongest point. But to keep the story going and maintain the reader’s interest, engagement, and appeal, the characters will need to be developed; otherwise, it would be nothing more than a series of sex scenes akin to pornography, where the story—which should serve as the underlying structure—would be invisible.

I just saw that the artist's Suscribestar account is under review. I wish the guy all the luck in the world and hope they don't shut it down.
SS hasn't verified his account because he doesn't have enough followers on social media (that's nonsense—who cares? I never go on those sites anyway, and there's no shortage of REAL dedicated sites).

Yes, he has his work cut out for him; all the settings need to be reworked to achieve a higher aesthetic quality. He needs to do his research. For example, :

Chapter 1 > pages 082 to 101
Laura’s bedroom. It’s a guy’s room, not a girl’s—and certainly not a woman’s. There’s no warm, personalized decor—women create their own aesthetic worlds, especially in their bedrooms. There’s usually a vanity table for makeup and other items specific to women. The furniture is made of natural wood, but the mirror is metal and placed on the floor? That’s inconsistent.

Chapter 1 > images 082, 084, 087
There are curtains at her bedroom window. Images 100 and 101 (Final) > The curtains are gone, and the window frame is as hideous as it is simplistic.

Furthermore, in Chapter 1 > images 082, 100, and 101 (Final)
The window is to the LEFT of her bed. Whereas in images 083, 084, 085, and 087, the window is now to the RIGHT. Could her room have windows on both sides of the bed, even though it’s so narrow between the two walls/partitions? No way...

But, he deserves credit for choosing body measurements for Laura that aren't the usual unrealistic big breasts (especially in terms of their shape, fit, and nipple placement) and big butts. At least he chose a body that looks like a real woman—the kind we might come across in (real) life. Even though, personally, I prefer any natural woman to any artificial, enhanced beauty—starting with the absence of female body hair, which is, after all, natural. (Software like DAZ3D does a poor job with female body hair, even though it has an extensive library of male body hair—which, in the end, men don’t.)

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Also, he deliberately published his first story in this file quality because otherwise he wouldn’t have been able to get his name out there. ((Is this similar to Laura's professional life?...) He comes across as a morally honest, humble person who asks for feedback so he can improve.

I published his series here to encourage him and help him gain recognition. He’s just starting out, but he seems to have a great personality. In contrast, we have the example of Himeros3D, who stands head and shoulders above the rest in terms of quality and skill, but whose personality is completely incompatible with monetizing his talents. Especially since he has a habit of starting stories and then not finishing them and/or developing them further. (“Eternel Summer” and “Dear Diary,” for example)—even though he uses two pseudonyms to publish, he follows the same pattern. And that’s a shame, because he’s far above the run-of-the-mill creators found on every page.

In conclusion, DesireLama has a lot to learn when it comes to graphic design, aesthetics, lighting, and skin textures (like almost all authors, there’s a lack of textures—or textures that are believable for the character’s age—and this is a major shortcoming).

Regards.

 

[Arthur Saturnin]

 

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About speakıng bubles, ı have changed tem so, so many tımes. For some unholy reason fındıng proper speakıng bubles were one of the hardest parts of my work lol. Also my fırst pages the relatıonshıp of laura and jake were obvıous but sınce there are many problems wıth ıncest ı had to change ıt to a more ımplıed varıaton rather then a dırect one and sınce my smart ass dıd not saved the photoshop fıles ı lıterally put speakıng bubles over speakıng bubles. Lesson learned ı need to save everythıng.
You have saıd letters looks (not very good) could you suggest some fonts for me ı would love to change them, ı was just usıng basıc comıc sans.

Hello DesireLama,

Here is some tip/exemple about font and speeches bublles I created and used.
I'm not saying it's the best, but it's the one that meets my criteria:

• Numbering on the speech bubbles to immediately identify the reading order of the text.
• A different background color for each speech bubble to identify the character.
• A font that makes for crisp, clear, and comfortable reading.

Although in the image I used for my example, the speech bubbles aren't wide and each line of text is short, which isn't the most comfortable layout. But I don't like long, wide speech bubbles because they obscure the image's content—except in clearly defined cases.

Example 1/2 with a colored bubbles background
(From Dear Diary, by Himeros3D, custom version)

Example 2/2 with a white bubble background
(From Dear Diary, by Himeros3D, custom version)

The font used is:
CC Richard Starkings Regular

Font include as a ZIP file attachment:

• CCRichardStarkings Regular.zip

 

[Arthur Saturnin]

Thank you for brıngıng ımage sıze problem to my attentıon. I have found a method to optımıze them wıthout loss of qualıty. All my fıles from now on wıll pe publıshed as compressed.

Your file sizes are perfect. At least in this regard, you stand out from the junk formats that most creators sell us.

You just need to offer two versions:

1. The current one, in PNG with no additional compression (lossless).
2. A JPG version (lossy) around 1 MB per file.

That way, everyone can choose the format that works best for them. As for me, I’m done with JPG—it’s the MP3 of image formats, and it’s pretty terrible.
I work with 16-bit per layer because it’s worlds apart from 8-bit per layer, especially when it comes to gradients. This also increases the file size accordingly. But size isn’t the deciding factor—neither for editing, nor for storage, nor for online hosting.

 

[Arthur Saturnin]

That beıng saıd readıng ı have a restaurant scene ın the upcomıng chapters and you wıll be bothered by how empty the table ıs

I really dont lıke and dont understand why almost every comıch ın thıs genre has gıgantıc boobs and even more so gıgantıc penıs sızes, ıt personally kılls the story for me and makes me feel lıke watchıng porn. The best part about adult comıcs ıs that they are real, no matter how absurd the story ıs, ın that unıverse those thıngs happened. So wıth just a lıttle bıt of realısım ıt can gıve you stımulant that nothıng else can as ıt gave to me by works of many great comıc and game devlopers. (That beıng saıd ı do have bıg boobs and bıg penıs ın my fırst comıc) ı was goıng to make laura a tomboy but ı decıded to go for the safer optıon for my fırst comıc and ıt dıd not really fıt her chracter eıther, ı have another comıc planned for (Tomboy Mılf)

I completely agree with you on this subject.

Lackıng textures that are belıevable for chracters age.
Thıs ıs actually somethıng ı focused on ı have searched for many morphes even started to learn blender(allthough blender ıs a long long road) lackıng wrınkles and imperfections on her skın does effect the perceptıon of age and ı wıll focus on these more ın future comıcs. I am experımentıng wıth many morphs. Recently ı have tıred to mımıc how boobs jıggle whıle havıng sex, comıng up and down wıth every ımpact, ı would lıke you to comment on that aswell ıf ıt looked belıavable and good or ı should dump the ıdea or ımprove on ıt.

Agaın thank you for your support.

I'll send you a PM with some info about ComfyUI.
Do you use ComfyUI locally on your computer, rather than online via the cloud version?

 

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The initial [DesireLama] - The Stream post has been deleted and rewritten; I made sure to take screenshots of the various participants so that the conversation history wouldn't be lost.


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