[JL78] Valentina's choice

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Part 7 (Page 139-148)
Part 7 (Page 139-148)

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Uhhh…sorry. Just saw you are the creator who posted here. Usually, one don’t get pat on the back… so I will do it now.

Nice work! The story is not my cup of tea, but it’s well-crafted with patients and it creates tension. Nice!
Also: DForce! Nice thing with the blanked (yeah, I saw that). Usually, people don’t put in that much effort. Thanks!
Lighting is nice. Could be more shadows/contrast for me, but this is just my taste. You seem to “pull all the stings” like Page_034 with motion blur. Good effort!
On the other hand, you might want to look into camera work, like "12 standard camera shots" (many youtube videos) and the “rule of third”. Because the right side of Page_103…it’s just wrong :--)
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Really like the quality! Keep up the good work!
 
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Professor Sinister said:
@JL78, what is The Rizzi Family about? Is it also NTR? What about the son and daughter? How do they fit in?
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Thank you, Professor, for the question about "The Rizzi Family".
The story won't be NTR based and will follow a choral progression, that is, with multiple "stories within a story."
How will the twins interact? They will be the protagonists of two exciting but separate stories. However, we're only at the beginning, and this will be a rather long comic, and who knows what might happen... 😉
 
Professor Sinister said:
The comic ends with Page 368 but the epilogue starts with Page 377. Are there missing pages?
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Excellent observation!
The epilogue starts on page 377 because there was a numbering error earlier, which I only fixed in the .rar files.
When I have time, I'll fix the epilogue as well.
There are no missing pages, just numbering errors from a poor and distracted beginner, on his first comic. 😣
 
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