If Lizzie is already pregnant with Lester's child, it will hardly be a one-up by Sarah even if she gets pregnant with Lester's child later.I have been thinking this upcoming scene where Sarah has sex in a motel with someone she dislikes before spending the rest with Lester. What if it’s not Richard Thornhill, Sarah’s current boss, but if that person was Lizzie who is now heavily pregnant with Lester’s baby. A threesome for the ages. It would break the monotony of repeated sex scenes between the couple and Dan would go nuts. We also know Sarah is extremely jealous of Lizzie and seeing her round with Lester’s child while Sarah’s womb is childless may be the tipping point on losing the birth control so she can “one up her rival”
Sarah will be fucked by OtisI have been thinking this upcoming scene where Sarah has sex in a motel with someone she dislikes before spending the rest with Lester. What if it’s not Richard Thornhill, Sarah’s current boss, but if that person was Lizzie who is now heavily pregnant with Lester’s baby. A threesome for the ages. It would break the monotony of repeated sex scenes between the couple and Dan would go nuts. We also know Sarah is extremely jealous of Lizzie and seeing her round with Lester’s child while Sarah’s womb is childless may be the tipping point on losing the birth control so she can “one up her rival”
Thanks for Chapter 23 adamblack144Chapter 23 final
Haven’t thought about Don making 20K+ each month. Not a bad gig for 300K+ per year. I hate Toxic Attraction has been strung for this long. He could have made the story shorter and produced spin offs, but Don chose to put all his eggs in this one basket as TA is his most popular and I guess he’s unsure he can’t produce lightning in a bottle again. It’s his story I’m just here to see how this convoluted story plays out hopefully before I die of old age or boredomYes and no.
I am tired of reading the same boring story chapter after chapter.
Of course Sarah and Dan should be doing something else with their lives instead of orbiting around Lester for 23 chapters. But this is another story. It should be another story.
But DS, with around 800 subscribers at Pateron making around USD 20k a month, it's hard to tell go fuck yourself. He's got his gold mine. With the beggining he had, he can throw any shit at his subscribers, that his cheerleaders will say "OOOOhhhh! Our God sent us another message from the outworld" lol
I don't expect anything, I don't want anything, I don't care about anything DS does anymore.
I'll have the chance to read anything he writes sooner or later. It doesn't need to be today, tomorrow, this year, next year, whatever...
I am here just for the fun of it.
It's simple. Because the money.TA and NC started so good,but now....I don't know....it's just more of the same, ....over and over again.
And I don't understand why both writers would do such thing ???
You've got there an interesting story/stories about little bit conservative (but happy) married couple on their new sexual journey to new possibilities in their sexlife, new sexual partners, new locations, new situations, etc...
But for some reason you (writers) stuck on the same "marry-go round" where ugly dude (with a magic dick) fukkks beautiful wife, and because of his big dick she can't say NO to him, and the husband ( who was the initiator of the whole thing at the beginning) has become almost comlettely irrelevant to the story by now. WHY ?
Why limit the great story/stories to that particular situation, again and again ?
Why not develop the whole story about married couple and their sexaul jorney a little bit further ?
There are so many possibilities in TA and NC – try something new, guys. Writers, Please
Yes and no.
I am tired of reading the same boring story chapter after chapter.
Of course Sarah and Dan should be doing something else with their lives instead of orbiting around Lester for 23 chapters. But this is another story. It should be another story.
But DS, with around 800 subscribers at Pateron making around USD 20k a month, it's hard to tell go fuck yourself. He's got his gold mine. With the beggining he had, he can throw any shit at his subscribers, that his cheerleaders will say "OOOOhhhh! Our God sent us another message from the outworld" lol
I don't expect anything, I don't want anything, I don't care about anything DS does anymore.
I'll have the chance to read anything he writes sooner or later. It doesn't need to be today, tomorrow, this year, next year, whatever...
I am here just for the fun of i
not only is he making money out of the fanboys/girls who are deeply invested in this claptrap, have you read any of the alpha drafts? it only just occurred to me that he's banging out a chapter, sends the draft out and gets his editing done for nothing, courtesy of The Faithful - the number of spelling mistakes and such that he puts out in those first drafts is absurd; I've been a content editor, proofreader and copy editor for a very long time now and I'd be seriously embarrassed if I put something like that out.Yes and no.
I am tired of reading the same boring story chapter after chapter.
Of course Sarah and Dan should be doing something else with their lives instead of orbiting around Lester for 23 chapters. But this is another story. It should be another story.
But DS, with around 800 subscribers at Pateron making around USD 20k a month, it's hard to tell go fuck yourself. He's got his gold mine. With the beggining he had, he can throw any shit at his subscribers, that his cheerleaders will say "OOOOhhhh! Our God sent us another message from the outworld" lol
I don't expect anything, I don't want anything, I don't care about anything DS does anymore.
I'll have the chance to read anything he writes sooner or later. It doesn't need to be today, tomorrow, this year, next year, whatever...
I am here just for the fun of it.
Bro, Don is the German. Be grateful that he writes in English at all, otherwise you would never have finished so well in your life and as a result would have committed suicide.you
not only is he making money out of the fanboys/girls who are deeply invested in this claptrap, have you read any of the alpha drafts? it only just occurred to me that he's banging out a chapter, sends the draft out and gets his editing done for nothing, courtesy of The Faithful - the number of spelling mistakes and such that he puts out in those first drafts is absurd; I've been a content editor, proofreader and copy editor for a very long time now and I'd be seriously embarrassed if I put something like that out.
At this point he is trying to drag as long as he can before giving it a proper direction.It's simple. Because the money.
Agreed 100%. I am getting sick of the repetition of sex scenes. It seems like he doesn't want to go the next step in Lester and Sarah's relationship so he uses the random hook ups with strangers as filler. They're meaningless. It's still enjoyable to read because he is a good writerI agree with many of @adamblack144’s points.
TA is an engaging story, and for the most part, it’s well done and balanced. I like DS's writing.
My main issue is that DS tends to walk back plot developments, which, while simplifying the narrative, also limits its potential. Pushing the envelope is riskier, but it’s more rewarding than staying in a safe, repetitive loop.
Even if he's not pushing the envelope, the level of repetition is a bit too much. Repeating almost the exact same car scene so many times is just too much.
Also, I think Sarah's vulnerability to Lester adds more depth. If Lester is not just a figure in her life but has control over her sexuality - being the only one she sleeps with, or deciding whom she sleeps with - that creates more tension and danger. A wife developing an emotional attachment to someone makes them a real threat. If she just sleeps with anyone, they are nothing more than dildos.
But of course, in erotica, there are many tastes. Some readers enjoy the tease, with hints of sex but no explicit scenes. Some prefer the wife to be a freeuse slut, some like her to develop feelings for the lover, some like it if she leaves the husband, etc. I think DS is trying to satisfy as many people as possible with one story.