Great scene, passionate, hard as it should be. Pretty good dialogues and though-bubbles too, maybe i would add something from her son, lines in the heat of passion, some dirty talking (usual shit "you like that bitch....huh?) or similar, or maybe things we saw in y3df comics here and there ("You're my woman now" or "you gotta be mine" or maybe even more crazed "wanna make you pregnant..." or "you will give me children.." or something) . Might sounds too much, but if in the right context, could be exciting. Well, maybe for the next scene. Anyway, i think Victoria is actually more believable as "mother" model than Brandi...really good one - even if all Pegasus models has kind of similar face.