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[Tal3s of Debauchery] A Mothers Shame

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A Mother's Shame 6 - (Preview)
Now out on Fanbox and Subscribestar.
https://subscribestar.adult/tal3s-of-debauchery

Nailing his mom with all he's got...
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Well....my opinion....I m a subsciber of this author...
and of MandoLogica , Nandof, lucius logan too but Tal3s-of-debauchery
is the best
His/Her comics are real and for some reasons
The first is the quality of the plot and drawings
Second....the stories are excellent,very close to real situations,very very erotic
Characters are real not only for the look (women are natural ,cute,without giant tits or unreal bodies with perfect curves) but for behavoir too
Boys aren t stupid assholes but very close to a normal straight guy with esitations and feelings
Plots are very erotic and,once more,plausible.

There is a defect....the stories are very slow...too slow....too much slow, the comic has often "dead zone" with situations useless for the plot,and for many pages too.
Author could reduce pages of 20% less without influence the story
Eroticism is strong and well balanced...at the moment the number one
 
pazzdan said:
Well....my opinion....I m a subsciber of this author...
and of MandoLogica , Nandof, lucius logan too but Tal3s-of-debauchery
is the best
His/Her comics are real and for some reasons
The first is the quality of the plot and drawings
Second....the stories are excellent,very close to real situations,very very erotic
Characters are real not only for the look (women are natural ,cute,without giant tits or unreal bodies with perfect curves) but for behavoir too
Boys aren t stupid assholes but very close to a normal straight guy with esitations and feelings
Plots are very erotic and,once more,plausible.

There is a defect....the stories are very slow...too slow....too much slow, the comic has often "dead zone" with situations useless for the plot,and for many pages too.
Author could reduce pages of 20% less without influence the story
Eroticism is strong and well balanced...at the moment the number one
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Hey friend,
thank you so much for sharing your thoughts, you deeply humble me <3!

In regards to your feedback about the pacing...pacing is always a difficult one, I want to have some "Slice of Life" Moments in between to give the characters and their relationships even more of a "real" feeling and usually I try to have these interactions become relevant or incorperate them again in a later stage during "sexy time" scenes and not simply create such "dead zones". But there is for sure always room for improvements. I guess the thing sometimes is, I in my head already know why a certain interaction is relevant even though it may doesn´t show in the here and now and sometimes these points when they become relevant again aren´t right away but maybe a chapter or two later.
 
Well....in your story FON,here totally unknow,sincerly I found the intercourse among son and sister s friend totally useless, and the relative dozens of pages a waste of time.
It s a normal sex with two young adults not blood related!Now FON is focusing in one of the most erotic situation ,IMHO but I think a common opinion,a mother that s start modelling for erotic pics with son as photographer.
Try to stay on mom/son relationship avoiding external charachters if possibile.
Once more just my idea
 
pazzdan said:
Well....in your story FON,here totally unknow,sincerly I found the intercourse among son and sister s friend totally useless, and the relative dozens of pages a waste of time.
It s a normal sex with two young adults not blood related!Now FON is focusing in one of the most erotic situation ,IMHO but I think a common opinion,a mother that s start modelling for erotic pics with son as photographer.
Try to stay on mom/son relationship avoiding external charachters if possibile.
Once more just my idea
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Hey friend, thanks for getting into more details what you thought of when first mentioning the dead zones. That really helps putting things into perspective. And I get your wish/opinion to have the focus on Mom/Son relationships and while that is a big part of "Focus on Desire", the story was intentionally made with that being not the only love interest for the protagonist in mind. The intention was to have somewhat a "mix" of A Mothers Shame and Forbidden Fruits plus something new and putting a different spin to it. Hence there is the Mom/Son relationship between Liv and Tyler and somewhat different but similar between Maggy and Tyler because they are not blood related while having another forbidden but completely different more innocent/hesistant relationship between him and his sister or the more "flirty teenage romance" like with Mel (sisters best friend) or Ruby (his female best friend). So I´m afraid that keeping it exclusively between him and his mother won´t happen but I hope you enjoy the story nevertheless ;). And just fyi because I already thought that some may prefer the "older" or "younger" fraction in each chapter both fraction get some focus time. That doesn´t mean that in every chapter, every girl is shown and has some "spicy scenes" with Tyler but in every chapter Maggy or Liv gets such a scene and the same goes with Mel/Aileen/Ruby.
 
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