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[Various Artists] Melissa N. - Melissa 822 inspired Comics, Stories & Artwork
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- crossdressing feminization gender-change transformation
mihaluck
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End will when he get his videocard back
Sam Emberlyn
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Its not done yet
Here's what Litkit said when she posted the last part
Also I'm not placing "The end" mark yet. Do you guys want to see an epilogue and maybe additional renders for Lucy's transformation? Should I waste my time on it when my card returns, or should I just start a new story? Please let me know. Hope you like what's turned out of this story
Sam Emberlyn
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Zekali
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Thanks for helping i could not find this anywhereIts not done yet
Here's what Litkit said when she posted the last part
Also I'm not placing "The end" mark yet. Do you guys want to see an epilogue and maybe additional renders for Lucy's transformation? Should I waste my time on it when my card returns, or should I just start a new story? Please let me know. Hope you like what's turned out of this story
Sur_GalaChad
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Sur_GalaChad
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Really hoping she keeps more of a natural look, Vanessa is beautiful so we know litkit can make beautiful women that aren't 150% bimbo
paimonisnotemergencyfood
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Deleted member 2170
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Posted a couple of days ago into tread Hanna23
paimonisnotemergencyfood
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A compressed pdf file
FanofKizaru
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In your stories, do things always end up in surgery?I noticed that some of my new posts have been leaked on Kemono. I would appreciate any feedback so I can improve my work since I am still just a beginner.
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Jackjons
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I appreciate you for asking feedback! I also agree what @Elaine and other saidI noticed that some of my new posts have been leaked on Kemono. I would appreciate any feedback so I can improve my work since I am still just a beginner.
Kemono
Now for my opinion
1) the story, you have lot to improve your story, you can definitely inspired by someone,but you need your own element into it . Work on story
2) your art is good, but not there yet ! I feel it is somehow not smooth,( sorry I don't have proper words) you can see the difference between your art and others like lilkit, Melissa and Hanna ,.. you will understand what I want to say .
3) you need a long story, with step by step transformation with proper explanation!
Lilkit's short story will be around 100+ pages
Why it is needed? Becouse if you transform the protagonist too fast the readers can not connect to it , so , slow transformation with proper explanation! Step by step, and that is why you need a elaborate story!
And last ! For your first time comic, you are doing great, I know many well known artist, ! Who were not good as you when in there begining! So you are allready far ahead, don't compare yourself with well established artist! There are honing there skills who knows how many years!
Focus on your story...this is life line
Elaine
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you are welcome to use any of my stories in fictionmania.tv for the basis of a new comic. just search for Elaine under authors and you are welcome to pick any you like. I would be delighted if you did that.I appreciate you for asking feedback! I also agree what @Elaine and other said
Now for my opinion
1) the story, you have lot to improve your story, you can definitely inspired by someone,but you need your own element into it . Work on story
2) your art is good, but not there yet ! I feel it is somehow not smooth,( sorry I don't have proper words) you can see the difference between your art and others like lilkit, Melissa and Hanna ,.. you will understand what I want to say .
3) you need a long story, with step by step transformation with proper explanation!
Lilkit's short story will be around 100+ pages
Why it is needed? Becouse if you transform the protagonist too fast the readers can not connect to it , so , slow transformation with proper explanation! Step by step, and that is why you need a elaborate story!
And last ! For your first time comic, you are doing great, I know many well known artist, ! Who were not good as you when in there begining! So you are allready far ahead, don't compare yourself with well established artist! There are honing there skills who knows how many years!
Focus on your story...this is life line
honkykong
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Personally it feels like you may be rushing through some of your stories. To me at least if feels like things go 1 to 100 really fast. I was really really liking Next Big Fighter for example and LOVED the concept. He went from a straight male boxer to not only accepting he's now a woman and going to compete in the womens division to now also liking men and having a boyfriend with next to zero push back or hesitation. I understand some brainwashing with the headset at night was involved but not all and even so, the headset thing just feels like lazy writing imo. Getting to the point of accepting his situation and being into men isn't necessarily bad but I feel like if it was a more drawn out and we had more progression in the character himself it would've fit better personally.I noticed that some of my new posts have been leaked on Kemono. I would appreciate any feedback so I can improve my work since I am still just a beginner.
Kemono
I also personally hate identity death / brainwashing stuff. That's just a personal preference of mine tho i'm sure a lot of people like it but I find a a lot of your stories end that way. Also as others pointed out some stories not ending with complete bottom surgery and such would be cool too but that's not a *huge* deal for me. I think you're doing well and will start to find a rhythm and comfort in time, thanks for being open to criticism and communicating with everyone!
paimonisnotemergencyfood
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Since you are using a white background, make the font colors a little bit darker.I noticed that some of my new posts have been leaked on Kemono. I would appreciate any feedback so I can improve my work since I am still just a beginner.
Kemono
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