[Melissa N.] Collection

[Insanio]

Sweet Change 14

Now we’re talking.

 

[Kobboldpot]

Sweet Change 14

Now we’re talking.

Well, that's it. I feel like an old grump.
Of course, I understand that sex itself is monotonous (that's why we're drawn to fetishes). But I can swear that I've already read this scene a couple of times, from exactly these angles and with these same phrases.

 

[Kobboldpot]

Well, that's it. I feel like an old grump.
Of course, I understand that sex itself is monotonous (that's why we're drawn to fetishes). But I can swear that I've already read this scene a couple of times, from exactly these angles and with these same phrases.

Okay. But what if we think about what could have been done differently in this story or scene? What we have:
1) The story is based on hypnosis and cakes and pastries. However, sweets (which are apparently spiked with hormones) only loomed a couple of times at the beginning of the story.
2) The hero's figure changed (And as I understand it, many people liked it here, because it was something new and unusual). But this was almost immediately reduced to bimbo.

Considering that this is NOT a short story, I would approach it as follows:
- More often we emphasize that the hero "rewards" himself with sweets for any achievements. Whether this is part of the hypnosis that reinforces the suggestion, or whether he previously suppressed his sweet tooth - remains at the discretion of the reader.
- Maybe he even has a treacherous cup of lollipops on his table, and we increasingly see him with a stick in his mouth sucking on sweets. You could even say that he is fixated on this.
- He goes to the gym to improve his figure, where he is met with rudeness and ridicule from the trainer. He trains energetically and exhaustingly. Actually, he is going through a reflection, having found himself in the place of the victim of his own ridicule, realizing how difficult it is to lose weight.
- After training, going through an internal dispute, he again decides to "reward" himself for a good job with a lollipop. The trainer notices this - and a quarrel occurs between them. The trainer is rude, saying that with this addiction you will never have a fit body of a fitness girl. And the hero realizes his reflection by throwing something like: "And who said that I need exactly this body?"
- Everyone runs away. The hero is sad / cries at home. Reflects on the words of the trainer and his own phrases. Thinks about how people really treat you based on your appearance. Understands how hard and offensive it is to be in a woman's body. And how he was biased before.
- He receives a call or letter from the coach, who awkwardly apologizes for being rude (later we can find out that behind the scenes the faceless boss also gave him a suggestion (not even necessarily hypnosis), because she was a witness to how broken the hero was and how he needed to be calmed down), and offers to meet, take a walk, reconcile.
- Dressing up takes place. The boss actually puts on makeup and primps him as if for a date, the hero denies that it is just a meeting.
- The place of the date turns out to be an ice cream or cake cafe. The hero joyfully lifts his spirits with sweets, the coach apologizes for his behavior. And we can already show the thoughts of not only the hero and the coach, where he reflects that the girl is so happy and cheerful. And very much so even not bad - soft rounded. And that a healthy attractive body is not necessarily stone muscles, but just enough to keep yourself in good shape. In the end, you have to be happy. And he himself, without noticing it, begins to fall in love.
- They take a little walk with these thoughts. We return to the hero's story, where he begins to think that the coach may not be such an asshole. Probably a sweet spontaneous kiss. And then they can walk to the apartment or postpone it to the next meeting from the second date.
- There, already at home, the coach admits that, by the way, he likes the curvy body. Maybe, under the influence of alcohol, the hero melts a little from flattery and undresses a little, like: "Do you like these shapes?" In his thoughts, there may be the same: "What are you doing?!", but we understand that against the background of his previous attitude to appearance, this really captivates him.
- The coach begins to touch him in all sorts of ways. It is clear where the situation is heading. The hero begins to get nervous, involuntarily thinks about the lollipops with which he always relieved stress. And involuntarily, out of habit, begins to suck the man's finger. With relish and passion. He thinks that this is a hint and drops his pants. The situation is kind of awkward, but there is nowhere to retreat and the obsessive habit-thought takes over.
- the final thought at this stage: better to suck cocks than candy.

And thus we get rid of this hackneyed cliche in the form of a stupid alpha male who pounces on meat like a hungry wolf on the first date, and a stupid victim of a sheep, limply numb with fear and passion that came from nowhere. Plus we reveal the conditions of the characters, their features, laid down at the beginning.

 

[Elaine]

Okay. But what if we think about what could have been done differently in this story or scene? What we have:
1) The story is based on hypnosis and cakes and pastries. However, sweets (which are apparently spiked with hormones) only loomed a couple of times at the beginning of the story.
2) The hero's figure changed (And as I understand it, many people liked it here, because it was something new and unusual). But this was almost immediately reduced to bimbo.

Considering that this is NOT a short story, I would approach it as follows:
- More often we emphasize that the hero "rewards" himself with sweets for any achievements. Whether this is part of the hypnosis that reinforces the suggestion, or whether he previously suppressed his sweet tooth - remains at the discretion of the reader.
- Maybe he even has a treacherous cup of lollipops on his table, and we increasingly see him with a stick in his mouth sucking on sweets. You could even say that he is fixated on this.
- He goes to the gym to improve his figure, where he is met with rudeness and ridicule from the trainer. He trains energetically and exhaustingly. Actually, he is going through a reflection, having found himself in the place of the victim of his own ridicule, realizing how difficult it is to lose weight.
- After training, going through an internal dispute, he again decides to "reward" himself for a good job with a lollipop. The trainer notices this - and a quarrel occurs between them. The trainer is rude, saying that with this addiction you will never have a fit body of a fitness girl. And the hero realizes his reflection by throwing something like: "And who said that I need exactly this body?"
- Everyone runs away. The hero is sad / cries at home. Reflects on the words of the trainer and his own phrases. Thinks about how people really treat you based on your appearance. Understands how hard and offensive it is to be in a woman's body. And how he was biased before.
- He receives a call or letter from the coach, who awkwardly apologizes for being rude (later we can find out that behind the scenes the faceless boss also gave him a suggestion (not even necessarily hypnosis), because she was a witness to how broken the hero was and how he needed to be calmed down), and offers to meet, take a walk, reconcile.
- Dressing up takes place. The boss actually puts on makeup and primps him as if for a date, the hero denies that it is just a meeting.
- The place of the date turns out to be an ice cream or cake cafe. The hero joyfully lifts his spirits with sweets, the coach apologizes for his behavior. And we can already show the thoughts of not only the hero and the coach, where he reflects that the girl is so happy and cheerful. And very much so even not bad - soft rounded. And that a healthy attractive body is not necessarily stone muscles, but just enough to keep yourself in good shape. In the end, you have to be happy. And he himself, without noticing it, begins to fall in love.
- They take a little walk with these thoughts. We return to the hero's story, where he begins to think that the coach may not be such an asshole. Probably a sweet spontaneous kiss. And then they can walk to the apartment or postpone it to the next meeting from the second date.
- There, already at home, the coach admits that, by the way, he likes the curvy body. Maybe, under the influence of alcohol, the hero melts a little from flattery and undresses a little, like: "Do you like these shapes?" In his thoughts, there may be the same: "What are you doing?!", but we understand that against the background of his previous attitude to appearance, this really captivates him.
- The coach begins to touch him in all sorts of ways. It is clear where the situation is heading. The hero begins to get nervous, involuntarily thinks about the lollipops with which he always relieved stress. And involuntarily, out of habit, begins to suck the man's finger. With relish and passion. He thinks that this is a hint and drops his pants. The situation is kind of awkward, but there is nowhere to retreat and the obsessive habit-thought takes over.
- the final thought at this stage: better to suck cocks than candy.

And thus we get rid of this hackneyed cliche in the form of a stupid alpha male who pounces on meat like a hungry wolf on the first date, and a stupid victim of a sheep, limply numb with fear and passion that came from nowhere. Plus we reveal the conditions of the characters, their features, laid down at the beginning.

That would be a lot more interesting than the story that Melissa has created

 

[Sam Emberlyn]

AM next part preview

 

[Devin19]

A super yacht, huh? Now when I think of Aphodite's Mirror, I'm thinking it would have been a hell of a lot easier and way less costlier to just use a woman actor as Nikos wife instead of going through all this trouble of making a dude go through all the surgeries (magical vagina creation) and brainwashing to become Nikos wife. Mehh it's a story that was fun reading early on, but now it has too many holes in it. Let's keep going.

 

[Elaine]

the two ladies on the loungers look like the two sisters and who does the yacht belong to?

 

[Sam Emberlyn]

the two ladies on the loungers look like the two sisters and who does the yacht belong to?

Nikos most probably

 

[@lexx$]

Hey, since when did Molly get blue eyes, I remember that at the beginning of the series her eyes were brown.???

 

[Nuvolari]

Hey, since when did Molly get blue eyes, I remember that at the beginning of the series her eyes were brown.???

Yes. On page 18 Mike's eyes are still brown, from page 19 to 35 the eye color is hard to discern clearly behind the glasses due to reflection, but on page 38 the eyes are clearly blue. If you really look it seems that on the later scenes with glasses (ex: page 31) the eyes might be already blue. Maybe as early as page 24. That's a bit weird, there's no mention of Molly wearing contacts.
You might be generous, dismiss the (admittedly doubtful) scenes with glasses as an optical illusion making the eyes _seem_ blue and assume that one of the effects of the hypnosis session on page 35 was to make Molly ditch the glasses (which she didn't really need, but was earlier conditioned to think she did) for coloured contacts. But it's all assumptions. It's not clearly stated anywhere.

 

[Just Another User]

Isn’t there mention of colored contacts during one of the makeover sequences?

 

[@lexx$]

Yes. On page 18 Mike's eyes are still brown, from page 19 to 35 the eye color is hard to discern clearly behind the glasses due to reflection, but on page 38 the eyes are clearly blue. If you really look it seems that on the later scenes with glasses (ex: page 31) the eyes might be already blue. Maybe as early as page 24. That's a bit weird, there's no mention of Molly wearing contacts.
You might be generous, dismiss the (admittedly doubtful) scenes with glasses as an optical illusion making the eyes _seem_ blue and assume that one of the effects of the hypnosis session on page 35 was to make Molly ditch the glasses (which she didn't really need, but was earlier conditioned to think she did) for coloured contacts. But it's all assumptions. It's not clearly stated anywhere.

It may be a continuity error, since that detail is never explained. But I think it's the best explanation, that she wears contacts . After all, I think she's the third blonde in Melissa's stories to use the narrative device of colored contacts.

 

[Fez 01]

Page 45

 

[Kobboldpot]

I don't really understand why. Why is it necessary to reduce all the sisifications and bimbofications to blue eyes and white hair? Because of this, all the final versions turn out to be indistinguishably identical. And it would be one thing if this were some kind of common plot arc, that some mistress/organization makes identical dolls out of different people for some kind of motives. But these are completely different stories with different characters. In the end, even the Bimbas can be different with their own unique features: a characteristic hairstyle, eye color, etc.

 

[Nuvolari]

I don't really understand why. Why is it necessary to reduce all the sisifications and bimbofications to blue eyes and white hair? Because of this, all the final versions turn out to be indistinguishably identical. And it would be one thing if this were some kind of common plot arc, that some mistress/organization makes identical dolls out of different people for some kind of motives. But these are completely different stories with different characters. In the end, even the Bimbas can be different with their own unique features: a characteristic hairstyle, eye color, etc.

Not all. Melissa has used a number of different final forms. I would point you to "A (high-heeled) journey into the unknown", "Need for Speed," "A K-Pop Idol," "All He Wants for Christmas," "Lost in Femininity," "Never Meet Your Heroes", "The Customer is Always Right" among others.
The reason so many bimbofication stories end up with a blue-eyed blonde is because *that's the stereotypical bimbo.* Hollywood has been selling that image since at least the Fifties. Don't blame artists for using a trope that was already prevalent before they were born.

 

[Kobboldpot]

Not all. Melissa has used a number of different final forms. I would point you to "A (high-heeled) journey into the unknown", "Need for Speed," "A K-Pop Idol," "All He Wants for Christmas," "Lost in Femininity," "Never Meet Your Heroes", "The Customer is Always Right" among others.
The reason so many bimbofication stories end up with a blue-eyed blonde is because *that's the stereotypical bimbo.* Hollywood has been selling that image since at least the Fifties. Don't blame artists for using a trope that was already prevalent before they were born.

I can't agree completely. It makes sense when the original idea was "We're making a Bimbo out of you" - don't worry about it and be a flirtatious fool (like in "roommate"). In this story, there were no prerequisites for a frivolous Bimbo.

 

[Elaine]

chapter 26 begins

 

[mihaluck]

Page 45

She got blue eyes in page 31 Suddenly right after first train in heels.

 

[Sstpa]

chapter 26 begins

Post the rest?

 

[hobojoe22]

Aphrodite's Mirror (Chapter 26 Part 1)