I hope that Lester goes to Dan's house and stays there with the children. He ends up playing on the Xbox and discovers that the game he deleted was played with the girls. And he ends up being the savior of the day, the kids start to like him, they even lie to their father (he doesn't tell them the secret of Uncle Lester being in the house). Just like in the movie between brothers (Dan finds out from his daughters that Lester is going to their house and that Sarah and Lester have sex all day yesterday). An adaptation of this part of the movie, with Dan being destroyed, Lester taking his wife and daughters and getting Sarah pregnant. That Lester is too much of a cow, because if he spends a little more on Sarah (financial security) she'll already be leaving her husband. And Dan's fear of having to dress like Sussy or use the cage. The cage could be introduced gradually. These are all possible ideas (I don't think Don would reveal this fear of Dan's if he wasn't planning to use it at some point). It would be nice at the end of the story for Sarah to destroy Dan and give herself to Lester.
Older daughter (why don't you stay in Chicago forever?), so Uncle Lester can stay here at home and everyone is fine, Mom sleeps with him every day when you're not here and they have lots of sex.
Hi makoto.
I respect yours and all other readers preferences and ideas.
But...
I prefer DS leaves these ideas to other stories. TA must finish or it will turn into the most boring erotic story of all times.
When we take it from the first chapter and try to follow the plot through chapter after chapter, it becomes hard to understand where the story is going.
The number of "clues" and "tips" DS gives throughout the story leads to nowhere. He writes entire chapters including sex scenes that most of the time do nothing for the story but increase the "words number".
If we pay attention to the last eight or ten chapters of TA, without the first ten, it's really a boring story.
It takes at least three chapters to jump a little bit with new possibilities. And then, more two or three chapters where nothing is confirmed.
Now Toxic Attractions is far, far away from the initial idea. It's not the same story.
He clearly just wants to keep making money until the last dumb paying customer says "I am out".
This way of supporting authors on patreon is abusive and when we think about it, it has no sense at all.
DS had a good idea and started ok.
But as the money kept flowing he obviously thought he couldn't finish TA without another one with the same commercial appeal.
None of the other stories he started went ahead.