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I'm not even disappointed the ending was trash because the story lost its plot a long time ago and you can tell she just threw a sex scene in there because she saw all the complaints about how stupid it was getting. At least it's finally over but considering how stupid bestie in the making is and how abysmal the pacing in KPoP is going I don't have much excitement in what Melissa N or whoever is pretending to be Melissa N will do next .
 
Well we knew that it would end happily ever after as far as Melissa was concerned but the story has a lot of loose ends and really needs a better finish. once i get the DS1000 story rewrite finished i can give it a go. Anything you would like to see in a chapter 31 and 32?
Well, it should be a horror story so it should either have a dark ending or a bittersweet ending. But that ship sailed long ago when it was established Elena subconsciously wanted to be an older woman all along.
 
Well, it should be a horror story so it should either have a dark ending or a bittersweet ending. But that ship sailed long ago when it was established Elena subconsciously wanted to be an older woman all along.
yes I was being sarcastic with my comment - a far better story would have been Elena hypnotised or in such a state of mind that she thinks she has always been a 55 year old mature woman except that when she dreams, she dreams that she was a 20 something young man who was married to a woman.
 
I'm not even disappointed the ending was trash because the story lost its plot a long time ago and you can tell she just threw a sex scene in there because she saw all the complaints about how stupid it was getting. At least it's finally over but considering how stupid bestie in the making is and how abysmal the pacing in KPoP is going I don't have much excitement in what Melissa N or whoever is pretending to be Melissa N will do next .
I'm also not interested on the remaining stories. Nabiya already achieved the last transformation and the story will surely revolve on life of kpop artist. Probably Bella will have another transformation but it will take a year or more.
 
I'm also not interested on the remaining stories. Nabiya already achieved the last transformation and the story will surely revolve on life of kpop artist. Probably Bella will have another transformation but it will take a year or more.
Yea I won't be resubbing anytime soon. I've wasted enough money on her for nothing
 
There are some basic techniques in pruning and story balance that Melissa N. could pick up from just about any workshop or any decent editor. Most particularly I suspect they don't not plan their stories in advance, which generally results in an unfocused and meandering plot. It's very easy for an otherwise good author to get deep into the weeds doing that and this is a good example. I think it's a shame because Melissa's work in shorter form is outstanding.

A while back (after the last sex scene, which was TWO YEARS AGO), I edited the first 1400 images of Aphrodite to remove all the intrigue/spy crap. I left all the feminization and brainwashing as well as kept any part where the main character or their feminization was the focus. I also pulled in a couple images from the following 900 pages making it clear that the protag was being drugged.

This left me with 561 images out of 1377. It's far from perfect - some of the early images are pretty low-res due to the download source and I included some of the animations posted here which people might not like. But if there is interest and I'm not doing anything against forum rules I could upload it.
 
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