[Pegasus Smith] Au Naturel

AN 23 78 pages...

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I see in both forums they use the word .. "drama" for kelly. pegasus start back in time the au naturel very simple with a continue development for brandi - dylan, no matter to what anyone believe for 10 was a true development for au naturel. I think pegasus try to start again the au naturel with chapter 11 and not make the corrections to story for that add add the master - kelly - victoria - andre and a lot of characters. there is no development to story but just some hot scenes time to time just to keep the audience close. tom with girl gina with big boy victoria with that "slip" victoria's hasband with keyla brandi with kelly andre with emilly's mom and some more but all these scenes are not offering to story. after victoria's drama there is kelly's drama now kelly will try to pull dylan from emilly by offering her holes, where is brandi the protagonist ? maybe sitting on sofa and finger her pussy ?. things must be simple......
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so time to take action......
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dykan29 said:
I see in both forums they use the word .. "drama" for kelly. pegasus start back in time the au naturel very simple with a continue development for brandi - dylan, no matter to what anyone believe for 10 was a true development for au naturel. I think pegasus try to start again the au naturel with chapter 11 and not make the corrections to story for that add add the master - kelly - victoria - andre and a lot of characters. there is no development to story but just some hot scenes time to time just to keep the audience close. tom with girl gina with big boy victoria with that "slip" victoria's hasband with keyla brandi with kelly andre with emilly's mom and some more but all these scenes are not offering to story. after victoria's drama there is kelly's drama now kelly will try to try to pull dylan from emilly by offering her holes, where is brandi the protagonist ? maybe sitting on sofa and finger her pussy ?. things must be simple...... View attachment 1294036
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Soooo sweeeet !!!!!
 
dykan29 said:
I see in both forums they use the word .. "drama" for kelly. pegasus start back in time the au naturel very simple with a continue development for brandi - dylan, no matter to what anyone believe for 10 was a true development for au naturel. I think pegasus try to start again the au naturel with chapter 11 and not make the corrections to story for that add add the master - kelly - victoria - andre and a lot of characters. there is no development to story but just some hot scenes time to time just to keep the audience close. tom with girl gina with big boy victoria with that "slip" victoria's hasband with keyla brandi with kelly andre with emilly's mom and some more but all these scenes are not offering to story. after victoria's drama there is kelly's drama now kelly will try to pull dylan from emilly by offering her holes, where is brandi the protagonist ? maybe sitting on sofa and finger her pussy ?. things must be simple...... View attachment 1294036
so time to take action......
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Yeah damn, it's time for action. It'll be good for both of them, especially for Kelly. Let's see if it relaxes her once and for all.
 
dykan29 said:
I see in both forums they use the word .. "drama" for kelly. pegasus start back in time the au naturel very simple with a continue development for brandi - dylan, no matter to what anyone believe for 10 was a true development for au naturel. I think pegasus try to start again the au naturel with chapter 11 and not make the corrections to story for that add add the master - kelly - victoria - andre and a lot of characters. there is no development to story but just some hot scenes time to time just to keep the audience close. tom with girl gina with big boy victoria with that "slip" victoria's hasband with keyla brandi with kelly andre with emilly's mom and some more but all these scenes are not offering to story. after victoria's drama there is kelly's drama now kelly will try to pull dylan from emilly by offering her holes, where is brandi the protagonist ? maybe sitting on sofa and finger her pussy ?. things must be simple...... View attachment 1294036
so time to take action......
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Chapter 10 lacked of character development on Brandi 100%, she didn't like Rory to have sex with him after all his stupid actions towards her for example when he put Dylan's cum in her mouth while Emily was blowing Dylan like a total creep, reasons enough to reject him that's why their sex scene felt so forced and out of nowhere PS failed drastically in the execution by doing it NTR in the process for a rivalry in PS words lmao, he should gave Gina some pages convincing Brandi and Dylan to have fun and after Rory apologizing to her but no he took the shortcut.

Chapter 11, 12 had so much copium on Brandi pov that make it so pointless in her experience on the island trying to excuse her actions with all that shit with The Master just to never seen him before lol what a waste of time, after that all went downhill even more in her development.

Time proved me right because after 13 chapters of that stupid decision hes still doing damage control just look at Brandis state and behavior completely restrained while the secondary characters are doing shit each other.

Chapter 10 was a huge mistake PS had good intentions to create drama but was so naive to understand his idea would be so polarizing in the fan base that change the course of the comic right after.

PS admitted chapter 10 was not well received even with his good intentions to create a rivalry but at the same time he refuse to give Brandi a 180 to make it up and instead he's giving Kelly protagonism while Brandi does absolutely nothing interesting, what a shit show smfh.
 
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xingye1987 said:
According to the author's quantity of around 100 pages, it has already exceeded half. But Dylan and Kelly still haven't started the game... There are so many things ahead that make people feel bored, so join Victoria at this time. The story of Dylan Kelly is going to be postponed again...
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Victoria and her sons can wait for AN24, the last 22 pages of AN23 should be for Kelly and Dylan first sexual encounter only imo.
 
This dialogue should have been between Dylan and Brandy I don't know what is planning whit Brandy as a character since chapter 10
 
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