Hey everyone,
I’ve put together a story outline, and before I dive into writing it, I wanted to share it with you all to hear your thoughts. Please feel free to share any feedback or opinions—you’re more than welcome to be honest. I’d really appreciate your input.
Synopsis-
In a lakehouse, a family opens the door to emotional and sexual freedom when a father gives his blessing for his wife and son to explore their long-simmering attraction.
What begins as a summer retreat becomes a lifelong bond built on love, trust, and pleasure without shame.
Skimmed over it. Seems okay to me. Feels like a cozy moment in time, a vacation that never ends, and takes a lot of the extra stuff out that may not be needed (
like dad going to work or going to school or looking for work, etc). Though it's best to reference but not get into detail in stuff that's boring or stuff we have to do IRL.
Couple notes, personally i like long detailed sex scenes, enough that i can actually enjoy them. Seeing a 1-2 paragraph sex scene may be find more for a break in a adventure story that's not really suppose to be erotica is fine. When i do ERP i usually try to target at least 8 posts (
which is... 2 paragraphs per person, so about 30+ paragraphs. Keep in mind n ERP replies tend to be 10-15 minutes apart, and a scene usually takes about 2 hours IRL while be about 10 minutes in story). If that seems too much, then target a page or two. I found there's a lot of ways to add fluff in descriptions without advancing a scene too fast.
Second. Lots of sex in erotica is good, but you also need a cooldown period too. Cuddling, other downtime activities. You have them swimming in a lake, have them cooking, add sexual tension that leads to the next scene in a few pages. I'd think light touches, innuendoes, or outright groping even (
say he's cooking burgers at the BBQ, and she hugs him from behind nibbles on his ear and gropes him for a few seconds saying how she wants him) then when he's hot and bothered leaving. She's only a cock-tease if she doesn't intend to give in, as soon as he can he'd put the grill in a state where he can pause and rail her on the table in the open, probably with dad watching. Though if you dropped the outright groping, the sexual tension could be far more subtle, touching hands while if they were at a store, brushing feet under the table while eating at a cafe, etc. (
yeah these don't apply here since the outline is only the three of them, but you get the idea).
Anyways, the cooldown doesn't need to be very long. But you seem to have it mapped pretty decently so i doubt you'll have problems on this front.