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[Various Artists] Melissa N. - Melissa 822 inspired Comics, Stories & Artwork

I noticed that some of my new posts have been leaked on Kemono. I would appreciate any feedback so I can improve my work since I am still just a beginner.
You have potential. In my opinion it is very good just need to improve the story and writing. Also you can be creative since you’re in charge of your own story so don’t be formulaic.
 
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Love Caroline and Daisy friendship, but i would had liked more if Daisy told Caroline that she see her "like a sister" (a half-lie, as the 2 are father & daughter) that would had made them even closer
 
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Love Caroline and Daisy friendship, but i would had liked more if Daisy told Caroline that she see her "like a sister" (a half-lie, as the 2 are really siblings) that would had made them even closer
they are actually father/daughter, not siblings (revealed in part 15)
 
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College Girlfriends/His Leash Is Short As Well As His Skirt part 4 part 5
 

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Hi guys! TgLulu here
I would love to know your opinion about my comics!
Please, share any feedback about anything you guys think about my comics
Can be an overall feedback or a more structured of every comic shared on kemono

Just a friendly reminder, this is just my hobby and as a finance person, I monetize my hobby, no problem about sharing my work here (just a little bit with the vampires of svscomics and etc...)
If you enjoy my work, subscribe my Patreon!
 
hi Lulu i like your comics but i think perhaps English isnt your first language. Did you ever finish the nerd story?
 
hi Lulu i like your comics but i think perhaps English isnt your first language. Did you ever finish the nerd story?
Hi!
1- Well, yeah, I'm Brazilian, I even say that on my DeviantArt profile
Of course I'll never have a perfect english, even working on a career that makes me speak almost every day.
Let's say that I use this hobby as a school teacher, everyday I learn a new word, a new sentence, a new slang... The problem is, I can't write every day...

2- About the nerd history, not yet, still on going.
I have some chapters to post, but it's a complex history, not only about sex...
Let's say that I want to use this story to:
A- Improve my render skill to be like Emory Ahlberg
B- Improve my writing skill to be like CBlack (just without the bimbo slut that every character turn)
Atm I feel like I need to create better villains and better endings, but it's a process...
 
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Lulu
if you need help with English I would be happy to help but I am not able to speak Portuguese. lol

I liked the premise of the Nerd story where a poor student is drip fed money, clothes and hormones by a sugar daddy in return for becoming more feminine. Then when the changes progress his mom notices and drags him off to a gender therapist and it becomes clear that the motive by the sugar daddy is that the nerd becomes a finanical dominatrix online.

best wishes
 
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