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Looking for Don Silver thread Toxic Attraction chapters

It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want. I would be down to give it a shot if you didn’t immediately post chapters of the contact (which you don’t like anyway) here the day after I release them on smashwords! Yeesh, i only have one paid chapter, the rest are free after a month!

That said, I would have to understand the actual structure of what you guys want better. If you want the husband to have a strong backbone, and the wife to not be a slut for the other man or enjoy him much at all, then there isn’t a lot of room for length and development, no?

Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?

Or does the wife start cheating then the husband is angry so he divorces her? And we get a chapter on how good the husbands life becomes and how bad hers is?

Or does the husband want the wife to see another man and she is just reluctant the whole time? And the husband is in charge and manipulating both the wife and the other man?

Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?

Oh yeah, you've been completely brainwashed by stories like *TA*. If, to you, a story is only interesting when the husband is a pathetic spineless wimp who keeps letting himself be humiliated more and more without doing anything, the wife is a brainless slut with no respect for her husband, and the bull is a walking cliché—a filthy fat slob who's somehow a sex god—then there's really no hope for your story.

And you talk about character development? What kind of development is it when the husband just becomes dumber and more controlled by his fetish? What kind of development is it when the wife becomes so addicted to the bull that she no longer respects or loves her husband? What kind of development is it when the bull is portrayed as all-powerful despite his appearance suggesting the complete opposite?

At the end of the day, it's your story, but claiming there can't be character development unless the husband is weak and the wife isn't enough of a slut is quite a statement. You simply sacrificed the couple's love and chemistry to make hardcore cuckold content for the people willing to pay, just like Don's and so many others.

Go ahead and keep copying *TA*. Make us dream. Make James even weaker and dumber than Dan, make Jenna even more of a treacherous, loveless slut than Sarah, and make Ray an even fatter, uglier, stinkier bull who's somehow an even greater sex god than Lester. That'll be some great character development, w
on't it?
 
Oh yeah, you've been completely brainwashed by stories like *TA*. If, to you, a story is only interesting when the husband is a pathetic spineless wimp who keeps letting himself be humiliated more and more without doing anything, the wife is a brainless slut with no respect for her husband, and the bull is a walking cliché—a filthy fat slob who's somehow a sex god—then there's really no hope for your story.

And you talk about character development? What kind of development is it when the husband just becomes dumber and more controlled by his fetish? What kind of development is it when the wife becomes so addicted to the bull that she no longer respects or loves her husband? What kind of development is it when the bull is portrayed as all-powerful despite his appearance suggesting the complete opposite?

At the end of the day, it's your story, but claiming there can't be character development unless the husband is weak and the wife isn't enough of a slut is quite a statement. You simply sacrificed the couple's love and chemistry to make hardcore cuckold content for the people willing to pay, just like Don's and so many others.

Go ahead and keep copying *TA*. Make us dream. Make James even weaker and dumber than Dan, make Jenna even more of a treacherous, loveless slut than Sarah, and make Ray an even fatter, uglier, stinkier bull who's somehow an even greater sex god than Lester. That'll be some great character development, w
on't it?
I guess different strokes for different folks

I'm personally loving the hardcore style and only hoping it goes further than TA! This is basically a better TA
 
Oh yeah, you've been completely brainwashed by stories like *TA*. If, to you, a story is only interesting when the husband is a pathetic spineless wimp who keeps letting himself be humiliated more and more without doing anything, the wife is a brainless slut with no respect for her husband, and the bull is a walking cliché—a filthy fat slob who's somehow a sex god—then there's really no hope for your story.

And you talk about character development? What kind of development is it when the husband just becomes dumber and more controlled by his fetish? What kind of development is it when the wife becomes so addicted to the bull that she no longer respects or loves her husband? What kind of development is it when the bull is portrayed as all-powerful despite his appearance suggesting the complete opposite?

At the end of the day, it's your story, but claiming there can't be character development unless the husband is weak and the wife isn't enough of a slut is quite a statement. You simply sacrificed the couple's love and chemistry to make hardcore cuckold content for the people willing to pay, just like Don's and so many others.

Go ahead and keep copying *TA*. Make us dream. Make James even weaker and dumber than Dan, make Jenna even more of a treacherous, loveless slut than Sarah, and make Ray an even fatter, uglier, stinkier bull who's somehow an even greater sex god than Lester. That'll be some great character development, w
on't it?
Interesting points, however, I don't agree.
Seems like you're reading a different story.
 
This comment is addressed directly to the author! * THE CONTACT *

... I’d also like to point out the scene with the table. I’d really like to understand why you leave James standing there looking stupid and doing nothing, whilst you portray Ray as the hero who comes to Jenna’s rescue in her hour of need.
Why? What are you trying to achieve with this?
I’ve been wondering whether you might be planning for Jenna to gradually drift away from James and instead devote herself emotionally and wholeheartedly to Ray.
I’ve really tried to come up with another explanation, but I simply couldn’t find one!
I can understand that this scene might not be to everyone’s liking, but personally I found it inappropriate and even humiliating for James.

-- PC

It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want. I would be down to give it a shot if you didn’t immediately post chapters of the contact (which you don’t like anyway) here the day after I release them on smashwords! Yeesh, i only have one paid chapter, the rest are free after a month!

That said, I would have to understand the actual structure of what you guys want better. If you want the husband to have a strong backbone, and the wife to not be a slut for the other man or enjoy him much at all, then there isn’t a lot of room for length and development, no?

Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?

Or does the wife start cheating then the husband is angry so he divorces her? And we get a chapter on how good the husbands life becomes and how bad hers is?

Or does the husband want the wife to see another man and she is just reluctant the whole time? And the husband is in charge and manipulating both the wife and the other man?

Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?

I guess different strokes for different folks

I'm personally loving the hardcore style and only hoping it goes further than TA! This is basically a better TA
We're all here pirating other people's work... If you want to influence the author, pay for the product. If not, just carry on pirating and accept what comes. People are obviously paying for the content getting produced.

We're all thieves here guys. Makes little sense to critique what we're stealing from the owner, to the freaking owner...
 
It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want. I would be down to give it a shot if you didn’t immediately post chapters of the contact (which you don’t like anyway) here the day after I release them on smashwords! Yeesh, i only have one paid chapter, the rest are free after a month!

That said, I would have to understand the actual structure of what you guys want better. If you want the husband to have a strong backbone, and the wife to not be a slut for the other man or enjoy him much at all, then there isn’t a lot of room for length and development, no?

Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?

Or does the wife start cheating then the husband is angry so he divorces her? And we get a chapter on how good the husbands life becomes and how bad hers is?

Or does the husband want the wife to see another man and she is just reluctant the whole time? And the husband is in charge and manipulating both the wife and the other man?

Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?
I haven’t read your story yet but it sure is on my list . Keeping that aside i do want to give some suggestions. First i repeatedly hear people complaining about wimp husband ,wife addicted to big dick, old plotting bull but i think these things are choice of aurthors and what the demand currently is in the genre ,For example i remember in 2010s most stories were power imbalance stories about a boss leveraging his power to coerce a couple to open up their marriage and ugly bastard stories were far less hot because people didn’t like it.Even I didn’t like it but neighbour chironicles was the first story that made ugly bastard hot for me and many other readers.

I think every writer has the right to chose the characters and tell the story accoring to his liking and do whatever he want to do with the characters. Problem with most of the stories is inconsistency in character design and neglecting character motivations and feelings to achieve the conclusions they see fit without putting effort into making the decisions make sense. For example i recently read the story how far will you go and even though writing was upto par with writers like noviceavid it completely lacked character consistency. I know human emotions are complex but not so much that a guy give in to every choice of his wife ,how absured it might be and wife just neglect her husband’s feelings and needs just cuz she get drunk on bull’s dick. I know women usually catch feeling for one they have sex with but even most serial of cheaters feel guilt and remorse if they ever loved their spouse which most aurthor neglect to get to a conclusion.

And i think most aurthors who write stories are capable of writing stories which have good consistency but they either are motivated by their audience or they work according to a formula which is market tested. I still hope that many aurthors are there who are experimenting with different story ideas. As i have not read your story i can’t give any feedback. I just wanted to talk to a author so i can get his opinion on the matter. English is not my mother tongue,still i hope i was successful in putting my point forward.
 
Interesting points, however, I don't agree.
Seems like you're reading a different story.

Explain to me how I'm reading a different story. Did you read the latest chapter, where Jenna lies to and betrays her husband without any hesitation and any guilt ? Where she admits she's never had as much chemistry with him as she has with the fat slob Ray? Where she only gives her husband a token handjob because Ray tells her to, all while lying straight to his face?

Did you genuinely feel any love in Jenna's actions toward her husband? And what do you think about James changing his mind in the span of two seconds, completely influenced by Ray and his own fantasy?

Are you sure its me who read a different story ?
 
It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want. I would be down to give it a shot if you didn’t immediately post chapters of the contact (which you don’t like anyway) here the day after I release them on smashwords! Yeesh, i only have one paid chapter, the rest are free after a month!

That said, I would have to understand the actual structure of what you guys want better. If you want the husband to have a strong backbone, and the wife to not be a slut for the other man or enjoy him much at all, then there isn’t a lot of room for length and development, no?

Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?

Or does the wife start cheating then the husband is angry so he divorces her? And we get a chapter on how good the husbands life becomes and how bad hers is?

Or does the husband want the wife to see another man and she is just reluctant the whole time? And the husband is in charge and manipulating both the wife and the other man?

Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?
Don’t bother trying to make people happy because you can’t. There will always be somebody – usually somebody who doesn’t write themselves – who wants to complain about how they would’ve written something different and of course MUCH better. Except they don’t write anything different. Or at all. They just complain about people who do write and produce content.

My fave sub plot of this thread is the people who show up and complain “TA has sucked for the last 20+ chapters!” And yet here they are still fucking reading it, and still fucking complaining about it. Like nobody realizes they have the option of not reading stories they don’t (or no longer) like.

I am an artist. If somebody doesn’t like - or even “hates” – something I produce, that’s fine. Art is subjective. The ones I find amusing are the ones who show up and say “you should’ve done it this way.” Like no bro I shouldn’t have. You should go produce your own art because what you’re telling me is the piece “should be” something entirely different. But the difference is, if I wanted to produce something different, I could have. You on the other hand can’t.

So I don’t care about the cuck element in these stories at all. I am quite fascinated by the contrast, though. Older man seduces younger woman/ugly guy seduces beauty. Do I complain about the parts where the cuck obsesses over how he’s a wimpy husband and he never should’ve allowed this? Nope. I just skip over those parts. And then I don’t complain about how including them somehow ruins the story. It doesn’t.

I really enjoy your writing. You can really make a sex scene cook. You’re very good at creating the world you’ve created. Thank you for that. I appreciate your work. Don’t let the critics get you down. They’re like eunuchs at palace – they see it done every night but they can’t do it themselves.
 
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Hello guys,
Long time lurker here.
I created this account because of this opportunity to add feedback.
I am serial buyer of hotwife erotica, always looking for the stories that match my taste, which has been dificult to satisfy.
I bought the 5 available volumes of the The Contact on Kobo after reading the "previews" here, so thanks for them.

sire_richenbach asked about the genres we like. My favourite BY FAR is the one on this quote: "Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?". I think it's the one where the love of the couple is best preserved and the one that can be connected to real life. I don't know much stories on the genre. I rate Beat and the Beauties from kingbooruwa as a fine example https://www.literotica.com/series/se/410840. It was also the story that lead to me buy King B's - the author's Amazon name - entire book library, even if some of the others are more hardcore.

There's another one more recently, not on this site, from Stella Wynne on Amazon, called "The Kinky Housewife: Falling for the older neighbor" that's very hot and long, though it doesn't have the husband saving part. But it feels rather natural.
Another example more known here is Newlywed New Desires from Maddox Storrey, though the turnaround happens very late and it's point I am going to address on my review of The Contact a bit later down here.

I was at the end and remember yet another one: Alex Jamieson's "My Hotwife the Spy" two volume story series. Very good.

I too dispute this quote: "Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?" but with a receipt sort to speak. The recent, on Amazon, "Our First Wife-Sharing Experience at a Naturist Campground" from Wild Camper Secrets has the wife becoming a size queen but the husband from the start wants a new woman and the wife agrees. It's a long story but single volume. I understand sire_richenbach's reluntanct to write stories like this as they are indeed hard to into monetizable serials - they work best as standalone books.

But everyone has their tastes. With stories like, what The Contact is turning to be and most of Peter G Johnson stories, I buy the volumes until the wife loses respect for the husband - because without respect, saying "i love you" are just words - and with Peter that's usually volume 1, which is a shame as he has the best premises in the business - IMHO.

Now The Contact, I should have dropped it when the wife disrespected the husband at volume 2-3 with the SA charge but moving on. I decided to keep playing the findom cuck for a while longer.
The story is a risky bet as there are volumes with little to no sex so the plot has to stand. I respect the sire_richenbach for going that route but be careful. There's a whole different between what the characters say and what they do.
Volume 7 ended somewhat promising but the premise of volume 8 was ominious, the content even worse. As it is, the decision to buy volume 8 hinges on the plot of volume 9 for me and I don't think that's good. And that's because volume 9, unless some moneymaking plot device is used - will show is the husband is just a warrior in his mind or if he can actually decide and do anything other than being a passive cuck.
As a reader, I don't like the angst of having to wait for more to see if the character I identify the most has a good plot or not. In this stories, it makes feel like a cuck and I despise cucks, which ends with a no purchase.
I mentioned Newlywed Newdesires before and I will add Kirsten Mccurran's "The new wife on Milford Court". I only bought the series after the release of volume 4 - the last - and reading it to avoid a repeat of the disapoint of the similar "Tempting Kate" from Michael Andersen. With The Contact running up to 15 volumes, there's a risk of buyers with a dispositon similar to mine to wait for the release of the final volume to decide if the series is worth spending the money or not.

I will end this with a proper review of The Contact Volume 8 okay?
I use a lot of IA on my work and its presence was felt. I don't mind it being used. If it's IA only is very good and I am curious about the models used. The sentence structure of the wife describing the husband seemed rather OpenAI or some version of Claude - I mostly use Claude. But the dashes, oh the long "-" were cringe. Even if you use IA to clean up the text like I do in my work documents, be more careful with the final touches.
I liked the final sequence with the husband becoming aware of the wife not acting as his partner. I don't like his lack of action but it's part of the plot. I don't know where the story goes but be careful with writing yourself into a corner. At the current point, I see the wife finding the original premise for the corruption and siding with the lover because he showed himself to be the superior man. That could be an ending but if not, where to take the story from there? Total corruption, TA-style? That's an option too and your choice.
Also be careful of becoming "type-casted" though. I don't touch Manus Dare stories for ex. On the other hand, be careful about branching out and losing your audience - Alex Lee was an instant buy for me but after he joined the group of Kirst MCcurran and the others he became more hardcore and more "word-count averse".
I am also looking at the other story too. So far it has little to offer so I am on the fence. Waiting for more.

And after this wall of text, I am off. Sorry for the long post. I just wanted to add constructive criticism.



 
It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want. I would be down to give it a shot if you didn’t immediately post chapters of the contact (which you don’t like anyway) here the day after I release them on smashwords! Yeesh, i only have one paid chapter, the rest are free after a month!

That said, I would have to understand the actual structure of what you guys want better. If you want the husband to have a strong backbone, and the wife to not be a slut for the other man or enjoy him much at all, then there isn’t a lot of room for length and development, no?

Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?

Or does the wife start cheating then the husband is angry so he divorces her? And we get a chapter on how good the husbands life becomes and how bad hers is?

Or does the husband want the wife to see another man and she is just reluctant the whole time? And the husband is in charge and manipulating both the wife and the other man?

Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?
I have found your writing both intriguing and erotic. The calculating of lies no lies between James and Jenna are weaving quite the path and that Ray has fallen for deeply for Jenna and not just as a way to cuck James is evident when he acts as her protector at the table. Write on my dear.
 
Oh yeah, you've been completely brainwashed by stories like *TA*. If, to you, a story is only interesting when the husband is a pathetic spineless wimp who keeps letting himself be humiliated more and more without doing anything, the wife is a brainless slut with no respect for her husband, and the bull is a walking cliché—a filthy fat slob who's somehow a sex god—then there's really no hope for your story.

And you talk about character development? What kind of development is it when the husband just becomes dumber and more controlled by his fetish? What kind of development is it when the wife becomes so addicted to the bull that she no longer respects or loves her husband? What kind of development is it when the bull is portrayed as all-powerful despite his appearance suggesting the complete opposite?

At the end of the day, it's your story, but claiming there can't be character development unless the husband is weak and the wife isn't enough of a slut is quite a statement. You simply sacrificed the couple's love and chemistry to make hardcore cuckold content for the people willing to pay, just like Don's and so many others.

Go ahead and keep copying *TA*. Make us dream. Make James even weaker and dumber than Dan, make Jenna even more of a treacherous, loveless slut than Sarah, and make Ray an even fatter, uglier, stinkier bull who's somehow an even greater sex god than Lester. That'll be some great character development, w
on't it?
Mind responding to the content of my initial comment?

I didn't say "a story is only interesting when the husband is a pathetic spineless wimp who keeps letting himself be humiliated more and more without doing anything, the wife is a brainless slut with no respect for her husband, and the bull is a walking cliché—a filthy fat slob who's somehow a sex god"

I said "It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want." Then I named 4 possible gists where it could work, but noted some structural constraints for some (that they would probably have to end relatively quickly, which isn't the end of the world). This was meant to have some constructive dialogue about how a story under certain pillars might work.

I understand you are able to criticize "the contact", but I am moreso asking about what the shape is of the alternative that you seem to want. You know what things are by saying what they are, not enumerating what they are not. Just trying to better understand.
 
It is interesting to consider writing the kind of story you guys want. I would be down to give it a shot if you didn’t immediately post chapters of the contact (which you don’t like anyway) here the day after I release them on smashwords! Yeesh, i only have one paid chapter, the rest are free after a month!

That said, I would have to understand the actual structure of what you guys want better. If you want the husband to have a strong backbone, and the wife to not be a slut for the other man or enjoy him much at all, then there isn’t a lot of room for length and development, no?

Like is the premise that both the husband and wife do not want the wife to have sex with the other man, but some outside plot mechanic makes it so they have to? Then the husband saves her?

Or does the wife start cheating then the husband is angry so he divorces her? And we get a chapter on how good the husbands life becomes and how bad hers is?

Or does the husband want the wife to see another man and she is just reluctant the whole time? And the husband is in charge and manipulating both the wife and the other man?

Or is everyone just happy with all the boundaries and theres no conflict at all? The wife wants both her husband and the other man, the other man likes the wife but respects the couples boundaries, the husband is happy with the situation and in control. Seems like this gets boring pretty quick?

Hello Sire,

First of all, I would like to thank you for your comments and suggestions.

I regard this development as extremely positive and as a significant boost to productivity. The discussions that have taken place make it clear that your story “THE CONTACT” has found a firm place in the minds and hearts of its many fans and readers – something most stories are unable to achieve.
It is crucial that lively discussions – naturally without any offensive remarks – are held in a constructive manner, in order to keep the story fresh and vibrant.

After just two chapters, “THE CONTACT” has achieved the status enjoyed by TA, NC, BTHD, etc. It must be noted that the stories in question took a significantly longer time to reach their current status.
This is a clear indication of excellent writing style, narrative flow and content (The Contact) that is very well received and evokes a strong response.
In my personal view, the structure of the work is compelling due to its precision and vividness in the portrayal of events.

I would simply like to point out here that I find the way James (the husband) is treated, and the gradual erosion of his personality, disturbing.
I believe there must be an alternative way of structuring the events and shaping the narrative without humiliating him, wounding his pride or trampling on his masculinity.
In the eighth (8.) chapter, he was almost reduced to a *joke figure*, which undermined the balanced contrast between the main protagonists.
This direction the story has taken has met with disapproval from myself and numerous other fans.
It might be worthwhile to incorporate the concepts of YIN and YANG into the story to reflect the thoughts and consciences of James and Jenna.

In this sense,
All the best,

-- PC
 
I haven’t read your story yet but it sure is on my list . Keeping that aside i do want to give some suggestions. First i repeatedly hear people complaining about wimp husband ,wife addicted to big dick, old plotting bull but i think these things are choice of aurthors and what the demand currently is in the genre ,For example i remember in 2010s most stories were power imbalance stories about a boss leveraging his power to coerce a couple to open up their marriage and ugly bastard stories were far less hot because people didn’t like it.Even I didn’t like it but neighbour chironicles was the first story that made ugly bastard hot for me and many other readers.

I think every writer has the right to chose the characters and tell the story accoring to his liking and do whatever he want to do with the characters. Problem with most of the stories is inconsistency in character design and neglecting character motivations and feelings to achieve the conclusions they see fit without putting effort into making the decisions make sense. For example i recently read the story how far will you go and even though writing was upto par with writers like noviceavid it completely lacked character consistency. I know human emotions are complex but not so much that a guy give in to every choice of his wife ,how absured it might be and wife just neglect her husband’s feelings and needs just cuz she get drunk on bull’s dick. I know women usually catch feeling for one they have sex with but even most serial of cheaters feel guilt and remorse if they ever loved their spouse which most aurthor neglect to get to a conclusion.

And i think most aurthors who write stories are capable of writing stories which have good consistency but they either are motivated by their audience or they work according to a formula which is market tested. I still hope that many aurthors are there who are experimenting with different story ideas. As i have not read your story i can’t give any feedback. I just wanted to talk to a author so i can get his opinion on the matter. English is not my mother tongue,still i hope i was successful in putting my point forward.
Agreed, though i have read the contact and it is so well put. Kudos to Sire.
 
Don’t bother trying to make people happy because you can’t. There will always be somebody – usually somebody who doesn’t write themselves – who wants to complain about how they would’ve written something different and of course MUCH better. Except they don’t write anything different. Or at all. They just complain about people who do write and produce content.

My fave sub plot of this thread is the people who show up and complain “TA has sucked for the last 20+ chapters!” And yet here they are still fucking reading it, and still fucking complaining about it. Like nobody realizes they have the option of not reading stories they don’t (or no longer) like.

I am an artist. If somebody doesn’t like - or even “hates” – something I produce, that’s fine. Art is subjective. The ones I find amusing are the ones who show up and say “you should’ve done it this way.” Like no bro I shouldn’t have. You should go produce your own art because what you’re telling me is the piece “should be” something entirely different. But the difference is, if I wanted to produce something different, I could have. You on the other hand can’t.

So I don’t care about the cuck element in these stories at all. I am quite fascinated by the contrast, though. Older man seduces younger woman/ugly guy seduces beauty. Do I complain about the parts where the cuck obsesses over how he’s a wimpy husband and he never should’ve allowed this? Nope. I just skip over those parts. And then I don’t complain about how including them somehow ruins the story. It doesn’t.

I really enjoy your writing. You can really make a sex scene cook. You’re very good at creating the world you’ve created. Thank you for that. I appreciate your work. Don’t let the critics get you down. They’re like eunuchs at palace – they see it done every night but they can’t do it themselves.
Well put. Your comment about people who say they hate the story and have for the last 30 chapters reminds me of the classic vaudeville joke:

"The food at this place is really terrible. And the portions are too small!”
 
Oh yeah, you've been completely brainwashed by stories like *TA*. If, to you, a story is only interesting when the husband is a pathetic spineless wimp who keeps letting himself be humiliated more and more without doing anything, the wife is a brainless slut with no respect for her husband, and the bull is a walking cliché—a filthy fat slob who's somehow a sex god—then there's really no hope for your story.

And you talk about character development? What kind of development is it when the husband just becomes dumber and more controlled by his fetish? What kind of development is it when the wife becomes so addicted to the bull that she no longer respects or loves her husband? What kind of development is it when the bull is portrayed as all-powerful despite his appearance suggesting the complete opposite?

At the end of the day, it's your story, but claiming there can't be character development unless the husband is weak and the wife isn't enough of a slut is quite a statement. You simply sacrificed the couple's love and chemistry to make hardcore cuckold content for the people willing to pay, just like Don's and so many others.

Go ahead and keep copying *TA*. Make us dream. Make James even weaker and dumber than Dan, make Jenna even more of a treacherous, loveless slut than Sarah, and make Ray an even fatter, uglier, stinkier bull who's somehow an even greater sex god than Lester. That'll be some great character development, w
on't it?
Well it seems that is the formula that everyone writing is following. As they all kinda mimic each other. They're stretching chapter after chapter of the same repetitious drivel and nonsense that you can't tell one chapter from the next. We basically already know what's gonna happen before we read it were just wondering how bad it will be. Plot holes that are forgotten about seem to be another norm that is common now.
Don is prolly bringing in around 12 bands a month, they all what to be next in line. I just don't see another story line doing it though. But Don has a lot of losers feeding down the road of stupidity and he's a big a whore as the bitch he writes about.
 
Don’t bother trying to make people happy because you can’t. There will always be somebody – usually somebody who doesn’t write themselves – who wants to complain about how they would’ve written something different and of course MUCH better. Except they don’t write anything different. Or at all. They just complain about people who do write and produce content.

My fave sub plot of this thread is the people who show up and complain “TA has sucked for the last 20+ chapters!” And yet here they are still fucking reading it, and still fucking complaining about it. Like nobody realizes they have the option of not reading stories they don’t (or no longer) like.

I am an artist. If somebody doesn’t like - or even “hates” – something I produce, that’s fine. Art is subjective. The ones I find amusing are the ones who show up and say “you should’ve done it this way.” Like no bro I shouldn’t have. You should go produce your own art because what you’re telling me is the piece “should be” something entirely different. But the difference is, if I wanted to produce something different, I could have. You on the other hand can’t.

So I don’t care about the cuck element in these stories at all. I am quite fascinated by the contrast, though. Older man seduces younger woman/ugly guy seduces beauty. Do I complain about the parts where the cuck obsesses over how he’s a wimpy husband and he never should’ve allowed this? Nope. I just skip over those parts. And then I don’t complain about how including them somehow ruins the story. It doesn’t.

I really enjoy your writing. You can really make a sex scene cook. You’re very good at creating the world you’ve created. Thank you for that. I appreciate your work. Don’t let the critics get you down. They’re like eunuchs at palace – they see it done every night but they can’t do it themselves.
Oh shut up, who gives a shit if someone that doesn't write themselves has a problem with the direction the story is heading. People watch football every weekend in the fall that have never played. I like the watch the "isle of mann" race, but I'm sure as shit not gonna take off on my fire blade @180 through the city streets. Sire is following the boring troupe as ever other dumbass with half an ideal and a keyboard. It's boring, if they want to know how it's going play out all they have to do is keep up wit T/A. You need to grow up, you act like he's the next Nora Roberts.
 
Well it seems that is the formula that everyone writing is following. As they all kinda mimic each other. They're stretching chapter after chapter of the same repetitious drivel and nonsense that you can't tell one chapter from the next. We basically already know what's gonna happen before we read it were just wondering how bad it will be. Plot holes that are forgotten about seem to be another norm that is common now.
Don is prolly bringing in around 12 bands a month, they all what to be next in line. I just don't see another story line doing it though. But Don has a lot of losers feeding down the road of stupidity and he's a big a whore as the bitch he writes about.
Imagine if someone wrote a book and just shared it. Would people pay them enough for it? Probably not. Thus we're stuck with this weird subscriber system which is similar to the serial writing style of the 1800s iirc.

The word count on these stories is insane.

War and Peace is 587,287, and I think a one of the recently posted documents was 300k words or something. So we're taking huge works where nothing really happens.

Perhaps authors should do a sort of commission fund where they present a concept, have character options and a list of potential kinks and just raise the money to write and release it. More like an artist than a subscription service. Either way, paying for people to write fiction is better than gambling or paying a giant corporation. I won't shame them unless they don't really like their own art. Then it's empty and shallow.
 
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